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Deserving Chapter 7

szaleniec1000 Jun 18, 2010 01:25

I want to say there's no way Chapter 7 could be as bad as Chapter 6. Chapter 6 is what you get if you take all the tastelessness, plot contrivance and clumsy writing of Dark Secrets and cram it into a single chapter. With added Godwin. I still can't quite believe that.
( Chapter 7 has to be better. )

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Deserving Chapter 4

szaleniec1000 Jun 04, 2010 00:19

Last time on Severus Snape and the Chamber of Punishment Deserving, Harry and Severus had a visit from crazy!shouty!Kingsley. Which ended with Snape unable to do his knitting, and being hit with a ruler and dragged upstairs to the "chamber of punishment". Which is never mentioned again.
( Surprisingly, this is actually moderately SFW. Aside from a bit of swearing on my part. )

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Deserving Chapter 3

szaleniec1000 Jun 02, 2010 21:52

Here we go again.
( Deserving Chapter 3 )

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